~
may be
it was
a
skyburnt
instant
to mix mercury with sulfur
and exorcize the azure of tranquility
to drift like a fury-spreading symbol
over the guillotine of dreams
…choose the low…
of an unyielding fire
opening windows
into wilderness
like a moth toiling
through torn night air
to be inflamed
blasphemously
but
there echoes
the pulse of wings
although the world is asleep
unreachable
lost in flutter
exiled too deep
into the somber forest
of a magie noire
nightmare
unfolding
another
morning
again
.
.
.
.
.
yelena, 2012 (revised)
I love the imagery here–beautiful piece
Lyric melancholy, beautiful!
Beautiful! Fantastic word choice throughout (“a fury-spreading symbol,” “exorcize the azure of tranquility,” “a moth toiling / through torn night air,” mmmm) and I loved the breathiness and hesitation of the short lines.
I like the “sky burst instant” and the feeling of so much hidden activity in the quiet of pre-dawn.
Love the strong imagery and quick flow to this. Lots of texture and quite a story as well. I think your opening lines are the strongest and really grab the readers the attention.
felt the struggle… that poor moth
I needed a while to find an inner image for your poem. But I think the most beautiful flowers are those that don’t reveal their beauty at first glance.
“there echoes the pulse of wings” – I take it as the essence : )
Loved the descriptive verses, and the shaping too, I find shaping ‘adds’ something extra… meaning wise… methinks… xx